Landing Page Copywriter Critiques Superb Landing Page Part 3

In a couple of previous blogs, I wrote about the first half of this awesome landing page from Creative Direct Marketing Group and their client, Brainy Baby.

Let’s dive down further toward the end.

We’re getting to the business end of the landing page where they're trying to persuade the reader to buy.

The reader is here because they didn’t buy in the part of the landing page above the fold. So, well below the fold, the persuasion volume is at 11.

Note that the testimonial sidebar continues for almost the entire length of the page. You just can’t have enough testimonials. And the photos are well-selected.

We’ve got three panes to go before the end, let’s take a look at what’s going on. It’s all good.

Two windows from the bottom of the page, we're getting the FREE stuff, including a couple of bonus items.

 

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Then we have the double guarantee and a photo of everything you get...and it's a TON.

 

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The order form at the bottom of the page is crisp and the order form isn't an order form, it's the ONLINE SAVINGS CERTIFICATE.

Awesome. Note also that the little bit of white space at the bottom of the sidebar has been filled with a guarantee certificate.

 

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It's not easy putting together a landing page like this. Everyone has to be at the top of their game.

You need:

  • An awesome client
  • Traffic (in this case from TV)
  • A direct response copywriter who knows how to write a landing page
  • A graphic designer who understands direct marketing
  • The development team
  • An account exec to put all the pieces together

Let's remember that this page came from nothing.

Perhaps the people at CDMG will at least give us a range for the conversion. 

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I'm a direct response copywriter based in Charlotte, North Carolina. I specialize in providing copy and content for the direct marketing environment for clients around the world. I increasingly specialize in sales pages and landing pages. Enter your info to the right for my free series: Seven Steps to High Converting Copy. Or contact me here.


Seth Godin gets it wrong in blog, says direct response copywriter.

Yes! I dare to disagree with the great Seth Godin and his coruscating heid.*

* Scottish slang for head.

Godin wrote a blog titled “Direct response and the coarsening of culture” and this caught my attention seeing as I’m a direct response copywriter.

I disagree with almost all of the blog.

Here’s the blog with my thoughts below.

Godin's blog in bold with my comments in italics.

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Direct response advertising to strangers is demanding. You pay for your click or you pay for your stamp and then you get a shot at making a sale. No sale, no revenue, no revenue, no more stamps.

If you know what you’re doing in direct response, you sell plenty of stuff and have plenty of money for stamps. And yes—direct response IS demanding which is why most advertising agencies avoid it and the fact that there's nowhere to hide in direct marketing is the main reason a lot of marketing people think it's 'coarse.'

Sorry, Seth, you've got it all wrong about direct response.

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As a result, direct marketers sometimes race to the bottom. They sell what sells the first time, and use the words that work right now. If the largest conversion rate is for a flat belly diet, then it's the flat belly diet that gets sold. The public gets what it wants.

No. In direct marketing, we sell solutions. Just like everyone else. We don’t ‘race to the bottom’ because we’re always trying to improve conversion. We're racing to the top.

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And what does the mass public want? Shortcuts. Discounts. Claims. No room for subtlety or even innovation.

You’re right about innovation. We execute the tactics that ALWAYS work when executed properly. Creativity is about 5% of the deal.

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Yes, there are great products sold by direct marketing, but in most cases, those products were dreamed up and refined and beloved in a less measurable world.

Absolutely wrong. For decades, direct response has always been about measuring. Haven’t you read Scientific Advertising?

In a world that was 90% retailers and pr and word of mouth, the direct response around the edges was no big deal. It brings us the Veg-o-matic and bald spot hairspray, but it doesn't really direct the culture.

In direct response, we’re not trying to direct the culture. That’s better left to The Rolling Stones and Lady Gaga. We’re trying to sell stuff. It’s what you do in marketing. Direct response has always been a big deal to the people who rely on it for their livelihood...and this includes a wide range of companies.

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Here's the thing: going forward, just about all the growth in marketing spend is happening on the direct response side.

Why? Because you can measure ROI and there’s no place to hide anymore. And bean counters run big companies these days and demand accountability, not prizes.

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Google ads, email campaigns--these are measured in percentage points and in clicks. Without the tastemaking sensibilities of the buyer at Bloomingdale's or the quality guys at Fisher Price, the urge to compromise/shorten/cheapen/overpromise/dumb down is almost overwhelming.

No. The inference here is that direct marketing is all about selling junk. Plenty of ‘upmarket’ sellers use direct response. There’s no urge in direct response to dumb down anything. In fact, direct response is an excellent way to sell a complex product. I’m writing copy right now for a product that helps to heal horses faster. It costs around $600.

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It's already happening to TV and music. (The label doesn't have to please the music-loving program director. It has to please the YouTube clicking teen.) It's likely to happen to your industry soon as well.

There’s always been plenty of dumbing down in music but the availability of information makes everyone more intelligent...at least in theory.

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People who have never sold advertising sometimes point out that a new form of advertising is better because it's more measurable, because it provides exact data instead of clumsy diary systems.

There’s NOTHING new about direct response. As Dan Kennedy said: it worked 100 years ago and it will work 50 years from now.

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Do you see that most advertisers don't actually want better data? If you're not sure what's working, you can't get blamed.

Got that right, pal.

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And since you can't get blamed, you get to decide, to be creative, to create stories and fables, instead of merely being Mr. Ronco selling the bassomatic, at the mercy of anyone with a telephone.

What do you want, Seth? Creativity or sales? With ‘creative’ ads, you get creativity. With direct response, you can actually have both. SEE: GoDaddy.com TV ads which aim to drive people to their website.

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Measurable isn't always the only thing that matters.

As a direct response copywriter, measurable is ALL that matters. I’m not here to provide flowery phrases and advertising awards; I’m here to provide my clients with sales by persuading the reader (creatively, of course) to pull their credit card out of their wallet.

Here's the original blog.

 

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I'm a direct response copywriter based in Charlotte, North Carolina. I specialize in providing copy and content for the direct marketing environment for clients around the world. I increasingly specialize in sales pages and landing pages. Enter your info to the right for my free series: Seven Steps to High Converting Copy. Or contact me here.


 

 

 

Landing Page Copywriter Critiques Superb Landing Page Part 2

Let’s look some more at the landing page for Brainy Baby. Let's drop below the fold.

Note the sidebar that’s stacked with testimonials...and corresponding photos.

Also note the clear typesetting. Nothing fancy or creative…just clear type. Red headlines. Black body copy.

The copy is written for the scanner and the reader who wants more.

The first three paragraphs use a classic journalistic technique.

  • Provide a ‘hook’ in the first paragraph.
  • Provide some basic details.
  • Provide more detailed details.

 

Again…it’s a superb landing page and there’s more to come as we scroll down some more tomorrow.

 

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I'm a direct response copywriter based in Charlotte, North Carolina. I specialize in providing copy and content for the direct marketing environment for clients around the world. I increasingly specialize in sales pages and landing pages. Enter your info to the right for my free series: Seven Steps to High Converting Copy. Or contact me here.


Direct Response Copywriter Finds Ways to Improve Your Landing Pages

If you want to improve landing page conversion in 2012, have a butcher's at this awesome blog. Enjoy.

FYI...Butcher's is cockney rhyming slang for 'look.'

Butcher's hook = look.

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I'm a direct response copywriter based in Charlotte, North Carolina. I specialize in providing copy and content for the direct marketing environment for clients around the world. I increasingly specialize in sales pages and landing pages. Enter your info to the right for my free series: Seven Steps to High Converting Copy. Or contact me here.

 

Landing Page Copywriter Critiques Superb Landing Page

I receive Craig Huey’s email newsletter. Craig runs Creative Direct Marketing Group, a direct response agency near Los Angeles. It’s an awesome agency and I’ve done some work for them. I’D LIKE SOME MORE, PLEASE!

In the newsletter, Craig mentions a landing page his group put together to support a TV campaign.

Here’s the landing page. It’s for a product that helps young children get a head start on their reading.

In my next few blogs, I’m going to annotate the pages to illustrate what’s so superb about this landing page. Everyone can learn from its brilliance—even if you’re not selling this type of product.

Click on the thumbnail below for the full size image with comments. 

 

 

A few things to notice.

  1. Yes--there's a lot going on here but the graphic designer has kept the page clean and readable.
  2. The image shows that you get a TON of stuff.
  3. The pricing is superb...either get a trial for $14.95 or spend $199.95. Hmmmmmm. Which one will EVERYONE choose? Notice...there's no option NOT to buy.
  4. You can order directly from the page. One less click. NICE.
  5. Excellent social proof at the bottom of the page.
  6. The video does not overwhelm the space above the fold.
  7. A lot of landing pages include video above the fold and I think that's good BUT it should not dominate this vital space.

In tomorrow's blog, we'll scroll down a bit. The page gets better.

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I'm a direct response copywriter based in Charlotte, North Carolina. I specialize in providing copy and content for the direct marketing environment for clients around the world. I increasingly specialize in sales pages and landing pages. Enter your info to the right for my free series: Seven Steps to High Converting Copy. Or contact me here.